I had a hell of a time with this one, and I’ve been struggling with it off and on for months. Seldom has a single three-panel blank had so many of my scrawlings all over it. It’s still rather wordy, but it’s nothing compared to may of the earlier iterations. I think it works.
As a bonus, for your comparing and contrasting pleasure, here’s an alternate version I considered!
MRS. SHOEBOX’S ASSESSMENT OF TODAY’S STRIP: I think more people will like this one, but I like the other one.