Grrrr. I want to rewrite this one every time I re-read it, but for a different reason each time. I think this is the most distilled way I can write this gag but it’s really hard to tell if it’s having the impact I intend it to. In an ideal world, I would have a focus group or something for when I don’t know if a gag is hitting or not. Or I could just show it to you all and if you didn’t like it, I could wipe your memories a la MiB.
Well, if you laughed, great. If not, it was the light of Venus reflected in swamp gas.